I am unsure about this piece so I thought I would post it to see what sort of feedback I could get. There are things I like and don't like about it. Graphite pencil, ink, pastel, charcoal and acrylics on watercolor paper. Approximately 10x15 inches
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I'm finding the shadow iffy...I think it's because of where the light is brightest on the bird dwelling...like if you were standing there looking at it, the light would be coming over your right shoulder...not totally from the right side, which is what the shadow suggests...you asked :}
I like the door, the fenceposts, and the unseeing eye. That eye really adds to the monolithic-ness. This comes across with a heavy sense of place, and I relate to things with that sense. I don't like the moon, because it is small up there, and looks indefinite, almost like an afterthought. The colors are just right. Will you be sharing what you like and don't like about this piece?
I agree about the moon. It was purposeful and had significance but it looks out of place in its current state. I think someone else suggested I lighten it and I plan to do that and see if it improves. I am not liking the color of the monolith. I was going for a sandy-rock type look and could not achieve it. The more I tried to make it happen, the worse it became. I think I will try a different color from the original plan and glaze it on the monolith. I actually wasn't satisfied with the eye either . Maybe the new glaze of color will help that as well.
I find it compelling. Possibly if the shadow on the left side extended farther around the right, on the ground, so that the doorway had a stronger contrast with the ground, it might read a little more as "doorway"---at the moment, it comes across as a notch at first glance. But that's a minor quibble.
I like how there are so many different ways you can look at this work: the bird looks a bit like it's drowning in sand, but also like it's rising out of it. It looks like a fortress, but also like a mountain, and of course like a bird
I am not completely satisfied with the bird's surface. I was trying to get it to look more sand-like or earth-like but the more I tried the less I could achieve the effect. I guess it was meant to look like this.
In my opinion its very good. To me its your usual abstract and fun style. I guess if i rally had to find something OFF about(i cant say its bad at all) is the moon doesnt seem to fit, the lines seem really defined on it unlike est of it. Only i could see. Very good!
I've been thinking about this. It may be too late, but maybe if your paper was longer, you could simply use empty space on the right to balance out the weight of the bird on the left. But it's still great! I love your work.